I was inspired by Lord Huron’s latest album, Long Lost. Specifically, the amazing storytelling. After a long day of teaching and extra help and extra meetings, it was easy to fall into the song’s rhythm and craft this narrative poem as an echo. I do hope you enjoy it.
I said I’d go to the firing squad
before I left your side,
but when the war between us started,
I realized I’d lied.
I said I’d change to please you,
put a part of me aside,
But I could never sacrifice myself.
The truth is that I lied.
I promised to meet you
in that flowery dress you liked,
but I’d already donated it.
The whole idea was a lie.
Once you signed the papers,
I didn’t care if you lived or died.
And if I ever told you otherwise,
I lied.
I tucked my children in
said there’s no way he can get inside
and with goodnight kisses,
I continued to lie.
© 2022 | K.Hartless
Amazing piece, K. Love it💕
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Thank you kindly, Grace. I wrote this like the song in a confessional style, and I see now how powerful that can really be.
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You’re so welcome. It most certainly is. Wonderful.💕
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love the hypnotic rhythm and the twists and turns around that phrase ‘I lied’ —
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Thank you, John. It’s fun this idea of confessing things covered up. I’m sorry I missed your thoughtful comment.
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The repetition’s echo is beautiful, and then poem, while frightening in some ways, is also liberating and empowering. Lovely write, K.
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Thank you. It’s easy to sway to this song and I wanted my words to have that soft feel as well. I did find it frightening this speakers story and how it would feel to l love with fear for your family’s safety.
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You’re most welcome, always. The sensations and feelings came across wonderfully.
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Exquisite. Melancholy. Hope real life treating you better.
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Thank you, Mr. B. Yes, this poem braids a lot of threads but life here remains just as hectic as usual. 🤣
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It is so sad!!!
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Beautifully written, K! ❤ A very powerful piece that can apply to so many family breakdowns. Poignant and heartfelt verses 🙂
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I appreciate your comments, Tom. The speaker’s confessions came together, although I wasn’t sure they would. 💜
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Definitely ❤ You dropped some great hints making for a satisfying buildup 🙂
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and so it goes…💜
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Such a dramatic self-actualization conveyed here, brought tears to my eyes. Very nice
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Thank you. It was the sort of series of confessions that when strung together are liberating.
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Amazing my friend, truly 🖤
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Thanks 😊
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You’re so welcome my friend. I loved this one 🖤🖤
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Wonderful poem, K. I can so relate!! I get so excited to see your post!! 💓💓
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Oh, that’s giving me a hugest grin this am. Thank you. 💜
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You are so welcome 🙏 💖💖 I have a few more poems to post from your petite poem prompt!!
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I get inspired by your poems and prompts! Thank you for sharing! 😊🙌💖
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Wow, K! I can understand being inspired by this song. The tale you weave is so sad but one that is heard over and over. Tough subject matter, but written expertly.
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