Raised on black & white,
I’m normally no forgiver.
Besides, she’s a road walked,
a dead-end, a looking glass sliver.
To add emphasis to this,
I stand to deliver,
and just when I think there’s
nothing else I can give her–
I watch her shiver.
Artwork: ‘Your Voice’ by Joanne Nam
Tonight, Merril is the host at the d’Verse Poets Pub-Quadrille #144 Shivering. Craft a poem of 44 words exactly that uses some variation of the word “shiver.” Brrr. It’s dreadfully cold here. Hope you’ll join us.
Yard Sale of Thoughts 
I like the cold! Keeps the brain fresh
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Brrr. No thank you. Snuggled under blankets as I type this. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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I lived in Michigan for 3 years ! 😂
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This:
“Besides, she’s a road walked,
a dead-end, a looking glass sliver.”
Hit me as a man who is three times divorced. Call me weird!
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It was trying to understand that POV that prompted me to write this one, so I’m glad to hear it may be at least somewhat authentic. Thanks for reading and commenting, John.
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Your welcome! We all experience the world so differently, my interpretation may be unique…? Or not!
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She has been doing a lot of shivering this year. The cold blasts shiver through on a regular basis. Great poem.
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Thank you kindly, Dwight. It is true. I am hopeful for an early spring.
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Me too! You are welcome!
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Ha! A wonderful voice to this poem, and some stunning lines…that dead-ringer couplet….wow…
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Thank you kindly, Ain. I’m enjoying a conversational tone lately. It feels right sometimes.
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I think words have a way with you, K.
❤
David
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Yes, they do. And I try my best to keep them at bay, too. Thank you, David.
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A beautiful but sad poem.. 😦
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Yes, indeed. That cold goodbye. Thank you very much for reading and commenting.
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You’re welcome 🙂
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You deliver!
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Ah, now I’m all pink cheeked. Thank you very much, Hobbo.
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😂
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😊
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great rhyming!
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Thank you.
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Love the rhyming in this – and that line :’she’s a road walked’ – ouch!
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Thank you. I love to rhyme, but it’s love-hate sometimes. Look, I did it again. I really appreciate your comments.
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Really well crafted poem.
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Thank you kindly, Misky. Wrote it in my journal during my daughter’s piano lesson, but the second I heard shiver, I thought of give her, and so it was meant to be.
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I love it when that happens.
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So, you can offer her warmth. Isn’t that lovely? I like that. Who she is, I do not know but that you’re looking for something to give to her, tells me she is important to you. Lovely thought.
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She’s very important to me as she is me. If I could go to this moment, I would give this past self a glimpse of the future so that she could see how strong she was and how this was for the best. Thank you, Selma, for stopping by and engaging my poem.
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A pleasure to read your words and now that I know who she is, I like it even more. Stay sweet, and know she gets you… xoxo
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Very poignant words of regret on past relationships! Beautiful & bittersweet, K ❤
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Thank you so much, Tom. It’s these moments that make us or break us. In this case, she was cracked, but not broken. Thanks for reading and commenting here. 💜
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I like how you incorporated rhyme here. Not easy to do in a quadrille!
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Thanks, JYP. Rhyme is a blessing and a curse. 😂
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What a gorgeous spill of words!
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Thank you. 😊
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I love what you did here… It sounds like the conversation will turn 180 degrees from what you had intended.
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Indeed. Surprise goodbyes are the worst. Thanks for dropping by and commenting here. Cheers.
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You sure evoke the feeling of the complexity of relationships, a powerful shiver.
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Thank you so much, Paul. So many types of cold and reasons to shiver. I appreciate your kind comments.
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Hey there! Loved this poem. Glad to have stumbled across your blog! I am a writer too.
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Wonderful. Thanks, Kait. Pleased to be connected with another fellow writer. Cheers!
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The rhyme has a natural fit and I love the self-assured voice of the poem.
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Thank you kindly, Mish.
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There’s a lovely flow and unforced rhyme to this. It sums up a story we can only guess at, and a complicated relationship.
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Thank you kindly, Merril, Sometimes it works out that way. 😊
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Indeed. You’re welcome.
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Complicated relationship or not, this verse reaches out with its rhyming flow.
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Thank you. 💜
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You are welcome. 💙
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I like this a lot, K. it could be interpreted in several different ways…nice ambiguity!
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Thank you, Ingrid. 😊
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