High above the stock-still lake,
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
Placed more bets that it can take,
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
Below, lost lovers wade and ache;
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
The stars are dim as dead man’s flakes;
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
Reflection widens pain’s outbreak;
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
Upside down like ducks and drakes,
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
The heart has no hydraulic breaks;
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
Defy the odds, but mind the stakes;
the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.
© khartless 2021, All Rights Reserved
Ingrid is host for tonight’s Poetics: Oral Poetry. Join us in crafting a poem intended to be shared aloud.
Yard Sale of Thoughts 
Your voice is so lovely and the words are captivating! The second stanza made me grin!
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Thanks, Tricia. It was a fun exercise both the oral drafting and then the recording. Reminds me of how poetry can sometimes generate itself through sound.
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absolutely magnificent !!! that haunting refrain … I’m going back for another read ; it may even go in my commonplace book 🙂
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Aw, thank you, John. Wrote in the shower just tried to make it downstairs to write it down. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. Best reward.
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a shower poem? sometimes they’re the best 🙂
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For some reason; perhaps it’s the quiet, I am often visited by my muse in the shower. She loves water, I suppose.
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water and quiet, that’s it 🙂
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I enjoyed how the background noise sounded like raking after a while.
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Thank you, bonus of bad speakers. 😉
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Luv thre repeats, the read like the chorus of a song. And i luv moon poems
Enjoyed both the voiced and the written
Thanks for dropping by to read mine
Much❤love
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Thank you kindly, Gillian. 💜 Don’t know why I feel nervous about recording but this one was crafted orally and wanted to be spoken out loud.
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That full moon is relentless, and will take us all in with her spell!
‘The heart has no hydraulic breaks’ – my favourite line 🙂
It was lovely to hear you read – thank you for taking part!
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Thanks again for hosting. Great fun and as I shy from recordings it was great for me to read the poem a loud.
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I heard this with my crunchy flakes!
What a super breakfast. Love the rhythm.🙂
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Oh, the teeth that rake. So glad you enjoyed it.
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That old moon is hard to ignore! Perfect use of repetition, K.
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Thank you, Misky. It wakes me each month, and I am raked right in.
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Amazing, K. I just loved this! I read along with your voice and it was perfect!❤️❤️❤️
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Thank you kindly, Grace.💜 My kids enjoyed it, and it was fun to craft. Win-win
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Truly my pleasure, K. Glad you all enjoyed.💕
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Your voice is quite pleasant … thank you for sharing it and this wonderfully penned poem.
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Thank you kindly, Helen. Fun poem looks towards fall.
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The full moon only gives in with the breaking of dawn… and until then it can rake in quite a lot.
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Yes, agreed. Thanks, Björn. Has a monthly quota to feed, I fear. 😉
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Beautiful, beautiful use of repetition here 😀 the poem flows so naturally. Especially love; “Below, lost lovers wade and ache; the full moon rakes, the full moon rakes.”💝💝
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Why, thank you very much. 💜 this was a great exercise for getting to know dversians a bit more.
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K.,
You give fair warning in this dulcet chant, that the toll of the full moon’s spell of love can “rake” the heart with pain and “ache,” a bard-like but sage advice in tones of sepulchral wisdom. So well done, evoking ancient rhythms of sung poetry.
pax,
dora
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Thank you kindly, Dora. The full moon rakes me in every time.
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KH – I seriously don’t understand how your poetry can be so consistently wonderful. And your voice is very sweet 🙂
I like the line about the heart not having breaks!
❤
David
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You are very kind, David. I often wonder the same about you. Thanks for this uplifting message.
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Such a lovely voice you have! The refrain worked beautifully. Wonderful. ❤️
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Thank you. I was nervous to record this, but I’m very glad you found my voice appealing. Will post more oral poetry as it is a great reminder to make the sound of my poetry as beautiful as the meaning.
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well written with a great enchanting refrain. I love sitting under the moon….really enjoyed the audio. I read first and was taken in by the audio!
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Thank you. Moon bathing is great, and the full moon here makes its presence known. I wrote this one without paper or pencil which was a great way to just focus on sound and get into a rhythm. So glad it grabbed your attention.
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wonderful! and surely you are welcome!
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