The first time I read poetry
I thought, wow, this is strict
puritanical shit,
like a stole only worn in ritual
or like a ruler-up-the-back-kinda torture
where every syllable must be set in stone
and the lines have to connect perfectly like
cursive writing requiring endless erasures
before it has any value.

Then I read poetry that was history,
verse told in ancient times,
maybe without the rhymes
but with the weight of centuries
lying across its chest.
Laid in a textbook to eternal rest,
written originally on papyrus
supposed to spark our pride
that humanity
needs a side-by-side
to be remembered.

When I dared peek at poetry again
it was poised over my head
and I was told to balance it to be beautiful.
Imagery needing an interpreter,
and I was stumped and slumped
wondering if poetry was one of those wooden puzzles
that look simple,
but take you hours
and then you throw it in the
drawer by the couch
after it both frustrates and embarrasses you.

Then, a friend said read this poem,
and I thought oh no, you can’t catch me
I’m the ginger-haired girl,
but I looked on her page
and saw lines that swayed,
words that held their breath
like a soft romance,
a pitter-pattering of rain, and
I wanted to run out into that verse
and catch pneumonia.
I was so giddy with excitement
soaked by drippy lines.

Later, I picked up a thin book of poems
with a dandelion on the cover
and it said, The Forgiveness Parade,
and I read it cupping my hand to my mouth
because no one had ever showed me poetry like that,
naughty like something you’d read on a bathroom stall
and then add your own line at the bottom,
which is exactly what I’m doing now in effigy
for being set free to realize the flexibility
and flushability of what is really poetry.


This poem is prepared for d’Verse’s Poetics Night hosted by Laura, her topic being Poems to a Poet. I chose to write mine about Jeffrey McDaniel. A poet who turned me back on to verse when I discovered him in high school. I have shared his poetry many times since then, and this video below is one of his poems told with imagery. I hope you will find my poem in his style and honoring his work. Join us.

Artwork: “Peephole” Luis Ramos

60 responses to “McDaniel’s Poetry Peephole”

  1. You did a wonderful job capturing your thoughts about poetry compared to JM. I would love to hear you read this too. I am sure it would be epic. I love how you close your thoughts at the end. “which is exactly what I’m doing now in effigy
    for being set free and realizing the flexibility
    and flushability of what is really poetry.” Great job and damn, you sure did raise the bar with this one!

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    1. Thank you, thank you. Rolled out as if it was supposed to be written this evening.

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  2. It took me a lot longer than you to get interested in poetry… I didn’t think it was anything else than pretentious poop, before I started playing with words.

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    1. Yes, it wasn’t presented to me with any passion, but I found my way there. Now, it’s an inseparable part of me.

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  3. From start to finish this rolls and rollicks through all the ages of your poetry encounters with a sensational finale and a poet I have yet to venture into – bravo for a brilliant read

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    1. Thank you, Laura. Great topic for tonight as it allowed me to write freely. Fun and a good release.

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  4. Brilliant! and think you’ve inspired me to write something on my own experience of falling into poetry…

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    1. Thank you, and I hope you will, as I’m sure it was quite the fall.

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  5. I like his Hillbilly god.

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    1. Great poem, I know I was reaching to try and get on that level, but it was fun giving it a go.

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      1. My theory is that it is the age that you discovered him was probably the sweet spot. We are uber-impressionable at that age, things we pick up can stick our whole lives.
        Sorry, I was too tired when I read this to write more than a short comment.

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    Beverly Crawford

    And so it is … the poetry of some does not speak to us while the poetry of others transport us to special places. Poetry is a word buffet — there’s something for everyone!

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    1. Very true, and I really appreciate so many poets now. This poet was definitely a gateway for me, and I see him bring people who have aversions to poetry to the table time and time again, so there’s magic there.

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    Beverly Crawford

    And so it is … the poetry of some does not speak to us while the poetry of others transport us to special places. Poetry is a word buffet — there’s something for everyone!

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  8. Love this especially; and I thought oh no, you can’t catch me I’m the ginger haired girl, but I looked on her page and saw lines that swayed, words that held their breath like a soft romance, a pitter-pattering of rain.” A most beautiful poem 💝💝

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    1. Thank you. Yes, I fell in love with modern poetry, but now have an appetite for many different genres, styles and forms. It was really great to try and emulate the poet that hooked me into the genre. I appreciate your kind comments.

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  9. Absolutely stunning poem! I love the journey you went through from the first stanza to the last. So many good lines! The fourth stanza is my favourite. Bravo ❤

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    1. Thank you so much for these kind words, Sunra. Writing this was a good reminder of what I need to do sometimes, which is just let the words fall and the emotions come through without concern for any conventions.

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      1. Absolutely. I always find that the first words that come to mind are the truest. I’m so glad you did. The images you conjured were wonderful. ☀️

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  10. I really enjoyed the turn in the fourth stanza, and the idea of a poem being the rain you want to run into and get soaked in.

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    1. Thank you, Maria. Poetry can be drenching sometimes, right? Or splashing at times, too. I am glad that I was shown just how much poetry can do so that now I can also appreciate all of the traditional forms.

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  11. This was so engaging and entertaining I read it twice — and loved it again. Like a little journey joining you on your coming of age regarding poetry, and a peek into your soul. Really good stuff K! 🙂

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    1. Thank you for coming by and taking in my very free verse. Poetry is now such a part of me, and I enjoy so many different flavors of it. But, it was modern poetry that enticed me first.

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  12. I read this twice as well, so raw and eloquent in your journey to find the poets that spoke to you. I just google McDaniel’s “The Forgiveness Parade” and am enjoying every line! 💕

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  13. Fabulous. I love all the revisits to poetry. I love the descriptions. I am not familiar with McDaniels but you have roused by curiosity.

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    1. Oh, I’m so glad. His works remind me how poetry is not just about the past or trying to emulate the past but can be risky, futuristic, and bold. The best response I could imagine for this poem.

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  14. First time hearing of McDaniel, and I’m so glad you were introduced to him. I love your poem and I love his poem with images on the youtube. I’m forwarding the youtube to my kids.

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    1. Thank you, Lisa. Poetry, as its presented in school, is often so dry, elusive, even stressful for many, but poetry is really always been for all people to enjoy, and McDaniel taught me that poetry could be about anything and be structured in so many different ways. I hope your kids enjoy the poem.

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      1. You’re welcome and exactly so on the form. The pouring forth is the important part.

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  15. Your tribute poem made me smile! So interesting how your appreciation of poetry increased through the years. When poetry connects, it leaves indelible impressions in your mind.
    Well done!

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    1. Thanks, Dwight. I let it flow, as I so infrequently do these days, and it really felt good to return to this kind of writing, and remember where I came from before I started falling in love with forms and genres.

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      1. Yes… stick with the flow… form is always secondary!!

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  16. *resounding applause* for the ginger-haired girl!

    -David

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    1. Thanks, David. I must have been spent after writing this as I quickly fell asleep. It felt great to just let my words fall and enjoy them without trying to make them fit any molds. I must remember to do this more often.

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  17. This gushing torrent in praise of all things poetical is quite simply beautiful. It flows like a waterfall and then immerses you in the pool at the bottom. 10/10!

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    1. It was a gusher. Thank you, Hobbo. What a wonderful review of the currents, which makes me think I should free-fall with my words more often.

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  18. This is the first time I have come across Jeffrey McDaniel, who reminds me a little bit of Henry Rollins and his spoken word delivery. I enjoyed the video and your poem, in which his style shines through. I love the way you describe verse told in ancient times as having ‘the weight of centuries lying across its chest’ and the image of poetry poised over your head and having to ‘balance it and be more beautiful’. My favourite lines of all:
    ‘words that held their breath
    like a soft romance,
    a pitter-pattering of rain, and
    I wanted to run out into that verse
    and catch pneumonia.’
    It’s such a revelation when you discover that not ‘every syllable must be set in stone’ and the lines don’t ‘have to connect perfectly’.

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    1. Thank you for these kind words, Kim. It was great to let this one just pour out as it reminds me why I love poetry so dearly.

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  19. You did him proud … “doing now in effigy for being set free and realizing the flexibility and flushability of what is really poetry” … an epic write!

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    1. Thank you very much, Helen.

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  20. I really like this. It speaks to me. Even though I have started to write poetry – there is a lot of poetry I just don’t understand! 🙃

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    1. Thanks, Ruth. His poetry brought me back to the idea of poetry being unshackled and current. I love taking poetry to a new place and knowing it’s okay.

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  21. this cascades in an enchanting way. the poetry-love blooming, thanks to a poet that is him. beautiful.

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    1. Thank you very much.

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      1. you’re welcome, K!

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  22. so glad you came to poetry. it is what you want it to be. nice work.

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    1. Thank you, Sean. I’m thrilled to be a poet, enjoying lots of new flavors these days.

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  23. Absolutely love your poemGwen.

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    1. This is wonderful. Thank you very much, Gwen.

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  24. wow! this is amazing: poetry that’s electric, that jumps out of it’s box, free range poetry; I could read this again and again and will !!!!

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    1. I quite like it. Means a lot that you enjoyed It. I forget sometimes to just let go and pour words instead of measure them. This was a good reminder, that splattering creates masterpieces as much as careful strokes.

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      1. very well said !!

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  25. I just watched the video: it blew me away, even now: this is what poetry can be: exhilirating, up close,

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    1. I was sure I replied to this. Thank you, John. His poetry is all very much like this, enjoyable and laugh-out-loud but with a serious message as well.

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  26. Impacts me each time I view it. So glad you found it powerful, asl well.

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  27. This is hot. Glad you found the life in it

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    1. Ty. Remind me to rant more often. I like it, also.

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  28. I love how the first stanza starts with a bang!

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    1. Thank you. It was a super charged write for me. I need to do that more often.

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