Overhauled

Bulldozers remodel neighbor’s home, fallen timbers unforgiven.

Pot-bellied men pin and tuck saggy bits, resurfacing structure.

Gaudy new facade exposes more faults than it conceals.


Happy NaPoWriMo Day20. Today’s prompt is to write a new poem form for me called a Sijo. This is a traditional Korean poetic form. Like the haiku, it has three lines, but the lines are much longer. Typically, they are 14-16 syllables, and optimally each line will consist of two parts – like two sentences, or a sentence of two clauses divided by a comma. The first line sets up an inquiry or discussion, the second line continues the discussion, and the third line resolves it with a “twist” or surprise.


Artwork “Summer Breeze” by Galerie Barbara Thumm

9 Comments

  1. johnlmalone

    I like this form: it’s an exciting new form for me: it offers more possibilities than the haiku; I love the second line particularly; great painting and hey! this lovely song actually played; thanks Karen: an inspiring post 🙂

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    1. K.Hartless

      So glad, John. A fully functioning post. I’m giving myself kudos for the day. I also like the fun of this new form and may continue to craft them. Hope your day has fewer bulldozers in it than mine.

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      1. johnlmalone

        🙂 oh dear ; remember what Van Morrison said, ‘mama always told me there’d be days like these’ 🙂 I did have some rough patches, Karen, but when I spoke to the ‘grandies’, as Beth calls them, the load lifted 🙂 hope you have a good one 🙂

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